The Spark

A politician walks among kin
dragged from their pedestals –
he thinks of returning home.
Memories of each banishment enforced
by a hunger. Determined to change,
no matter what.
Train rides across a continent
as international waters froth and foam
with a variety of bubbled blood
from soldier’s churned bodies.
Waves roll with the wheels towards the East,
senses marinating in a union of sights and smells
writing a new history as the small group return
to the land of Persian shashlik and sweet pyrih.
Order leads to utter chaos and too much noise.
Then silence. A minute passes.
Now an aftermath of preservation
while independence stretches on shaky knees.
Lenin’s eyes stare down into the snow,
face down, toes turned up, cold as iron.
The final exile. Torn down and
carried away to expose their past.

This was originally part of my Three Random Words project using the words “lenin, foam, shasklik” from Damien Walter. The idea behind it was the exile and repatriation of politicians during the 20th Century. With so much change and so many shifting borders nationalism and a sense of belonging was both complex and often dangerous.

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2 thoughts on “The Spark

  1. The line “the land of Persian shashlik and sweet pyrih” is the strongest line, It’s just beautiful. The imagery is great . I would say though that it is missing some kind of stronger connective tissue, so to speak. “Determined to change no matter what” … Determined to change what? That line feels like a throw away. That line totally disconnects the reader form the second half of the writing. Just some thoughts.

  2. Thanks for the thoughts – I think because I knew what I was trying to say (about determination to impose personal politics and regime management as well as the impact of top-down politics) I didn’t see how much of a disconnect it could be for readers. Perhaps time to go back and rework this one. Thanks, again.
    V.

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